Friday, 16 July 2010

Early for the Poetry Bus!

Thought I would get on early this week and choose the best seat! I found the subject pretty hard but then we do want to keep stretching our brains don't we? So here is my version on Unrequited love:-

Apologia to In Memoriam.

Are we tempted, when love's unrequited
and our advances slighted,
to temper love,
to make it more exciting, fanciful
because we think that it'a not to be?

And if it were at last to be returned,
and if, within both hearts, the fever burned,
when passion turned to comfort and content
(as it most surely would as time was spent);

Would we look back to earlier, heady days
and wish we'd seen the error of our ways?
Or would the looking back excite the mind
to memories of passionate recall?

As Tennyson said,
''Tis better to have loved and lost
than never to have loved at all''.

28 comments:

Heather said...

Very true Pat and a lovely poem. Mine will be on the same topic but with humour in there too, as you will see when I have tweaked it a bit.

Gwei Mui said...

Hmm very reflective.I like it

Derrick said...

Hello Weaver,

If this is what you were struggling with, I'd say you've definitely overcome! Super poem.

Helen said...

Words of wisdom ~ wonderfully written.

Are you driving the bus today?

My Magpie and the Poetry Bus unrequited love theme kind of mesh.

lakeviewer said...

Tennyson is in good company!

Cloudia said...

We'd do it all over again like Ivan Osokin....




Aloha from Waikiki

Comfort Spiral

Totalfeckineejit said...

Curious questions and I'm not sure of the answers.But I like the questions for they are good reflective questions-not just words. Isn't that the purpose of poetry? Fine, thoughtful work, Weaver.

Totalfeckineejit said...

Could spark a reply, could spark memory, could spark poetry!

Eryl Shields said...

You know your iambs from your dactyls, I'll say that for you!

Shirley said...

Great poem! Have you seen Letters to Juliet? This poem makes a good accompaniment!

seema gupta said...

''Tis better to have loved and lost
than never to have loved at all''.
"very touching words.."

regards

Argent said...

I love the steady, measured pace of this and you built up to the ending so well.

Poet in Residence said...

I don't know if I can make it to the bus stop, but I think you have the best seat - and maybe the best poem too? Who is driving? Somebody else here asked that? Is it a mystery tour?
best,
gwilym

Argent said...

Gwilyn - I'm driving the bus this were over here.

Here's the link in case the hyperlink doesn't work: http://argent-delusionsofadequacy.blogspot.com/2010/07/poetry-bus-tickets-go-on-sale.html

The Weaver of Grass said...

Thanks for all the comments.

If you wish to know who is driving the bus each week you go to TFE's site (see my blog list) and he has a list on his side bar.

Helen said...

Thanks Ms. Weaver of Grass!!!

Erratic Thoughts said...

Touché...
Unanswered, but some questions they are...
Beautiful :)

jinksy said...

Let's hope the looking back excites the mind!

izzy said...

Thought of 2nd theme and ran back to the first- as usual I circle and
circle viewing my options from every angle.Thanks for this piece !

Peter Goulding said...

Somehow, if it actually happens, it never quite reaches the heady heights of the imagination, but few things do!

Enchanted Oak said...

Someone said you have dactyls. I thought dactyls were extinct.
But your poem is alive and well, thriving there on the screen of my computer. A fun piece of work. I hope my hubby answers with a tenderness now that passion turned to content.

Domestic Oub said...

I really enjoyed the contemplative nature of this poem - it got me thinking myself about the questions.

Titus said...

Really liked this Weaver - the complex, "old-fashioned" syntax worked wonderfully well. And it stretched my brain, and made me think.

Dominic Rivron said...

I am reminded of a short poem by Walt Whitman (/=line break):

Sometimes with one I love I fill myself with rage for fear I effuse
unreturn'd love, /
But now I think there is no unreturn'd love, the pay is certain one
way or another, /
(I loved a certain person ardently and my love was not return'd, /
Yet out of that I have written these songs.)

Jeanne Iris said...

I love the fluidity of these poetically posed posers, Weaver.

BT said...

That is a super poem Pat, with a great sentiment. Well done.

The Bug said...

Here it is time to write for the NEXT bus & I'm just now getting around on THIS one!

I absolutely love this - I know that for me this comfortable place of almost 20 years married is where I want to be - I don't look back with longing on those early months & years. There was so much to learn about each other!

Masia Mum said...

I do admire people who can produce such thoughtful poetry - well done. I've written poems and lyrics for years but always with an observational and humourous bent. I suppose I use this form of creative writing to cheer myself up - heaven knows with the state of the country we all need to find something to laugh about.
I've started another blog
www.transportationpoet.blogspot
Please other aspiring poets have a look and comment and maybe laugh.