Monday, 12 October 2009

All aboard the poetry bus!

TFE's Monday Poetry Bus is gathering momentum. He set us a more difficult task and gave us two Mondays to prepare - then dropped a spanner into my brain box, which is pretty rusty these days, by suggesting a "quickie" this Monday as well. For a time my brain seized up but then I remembered his original "five minute rule" - in other words - do a lot of thinking but then grab your pen and write it down. So here is my effort for today TFE - composed in about five minutes (and it shows) while walking round the fields with Tess:=

All Aboard the Poetry Bus.

The poetry bus
sets off from Rhyme
- on time
and goes to Free Verse
and worse
and places in between.

You need to book
- the fare will vary;
nouns and verbs upstairs
but nary
an adjectival clause
because
there won't be room.

And if it gets so full that
words are standing
then please obey the rules
because
you must always give your seat up for
a Pregnant Pause!

28 comments:

Titus said...

Lovely Weaver, and well done for hopping on board at such late notice. He pulled a bit of a fast one this week, didn't he?

The final verse is particularly brilliant.

C Hummel Kornell a/k/a C Hummel Wilson said...

As always, a winner!

Barbara Martin said...

You did very well.

Totalfeckineejit said...

Oooh,I like the sound of our bus in that Weaver and the pregnant pause at the end.5 mins? You sure work well under pressure-I'll remember that!

Wild Somerset Child said...

This makes me laugh - in the nicest possible way, for I too wrote something in 5 minutes (didn't know THAT rule either; you can see I am a new passenger.

Heather said...

This is lovely Weaver and made me chuckle. I don't think I'm up to taking part next week and will leave that one to the experts!

Reader Wil said...

I like "A pregnant pause"! It has a deep meaning and there is alliteration, and it's absolutely true that a break helps to be creative. Pause has a softer sound than break.
Thanks for sharing and for visiting!

Domestic Oub said...

Very enjoyable - left me with a smile on my face :)

Sandra Leigh said...

Ah. Free verse and worse. That's a Poetry Bus motto in the making. Thank you for lightening the collective mood, and for doing it so Poe-tically!

gleaner said...

I'm smiling at the pregnant pause and the delightfulness of it all! Very enjoyable Weaver.

Hildred and Charles said...

Very quick-witted you are, Weaver. I did enjoy the imagery, and thought the Pregnant Pause was a really nice touch.

jinksy said...

:) clever !

Dominic Rivron said...

Good one. What's an advectival clause? I'm disgusted with myself for not knowing.

Pat Posner said...

Ooh, I enjoyed that, Weaver

xxPat

Derrick said...

Hello Weaver,

Easy to see that you didn't miss the bus! See you at the Ball, soon!

Bonnie, Original Art Studio said...

I raise my hands and applaud. Wow! Five Minutes!!!!!

Poetikat said...

I love that last bit. Very good.

Linda said...

For the small amount of time you had, that was a wonderful poem! I enjoyed your rhymes. The final verse with the "pregnant pause" was great. Thank you for sharing.=D

Jeanne Iris said...

A delight, Weaver! Great thinking on your feet!

Pamela Terry and Edward said...

Ooh I adore this! I look forward to your poetry every monday. This one was so much fun! I can just see all the words crowding into each other on the Poetry Bus!! brilliant!

Phoenix said...

Lovely.. it is such a smiling little poem :)

Coastcard said...

A wonderful concept, Weaver. Your poem really made me smile! I'm wondering where you stand (or sit or beg to get off) when it comes to the free verse/rhyme issue!

Dave King said...

That would have been pretty damn good even had it not been a quickie, but as it is it's fantastic.

dinesh chandra said...

GOOD POETRY I LIKE POETRY VERY MUCH I READ TS ELIOT, KEATS, MILTON, BROWNING.

BUT YOUR POETRY IS FANTASTIC.

PLS ALSO GUIDE ME HOW TO WRITE IN ENGLISH I M HINDI POET.

The Weaver of Grass said...

That TFE has got us all working like mad hasn't he? Also - I really think that the exercise has done us all good - maybe we should keep it up - one poem a week keeps the old brain in working order.

The Weaver of Grass said...

Especially for you Dominic:-

An adjectival clause is a subordinate group of words including a subject and a predicate, which is syntactically equivalent to an adjective. Want an example? Don't ask.

Emerging Writer said...

you've left my words standing too

Karen said...

Great take on the challenge!